Monday, December 15, 2008

further up!

I don't really like the title. Well, I kind of do. I love the reference to C.S. Lewis's "The Last Battle," however I'm not sure it quite suits the poem. Any alternate suggestions? Also, I'm debating with the dash between "pent" and "up" in the last it suppose to be there?

Further Up!
by Joann Renee

There’s a hermit locked
Behind a ribbed cage
Seeking seclusion
Further in!
He swoons
With details
Of characters and places
Further in!
Reality crushes around
Crowding creativity
Further in!
Under cover
Of clouds
Eyes closed
Face wet
He sighs
Finally freeing
Uniformity’s captives
Further in!
Leafy green solace
Releasing pent-up brilliance

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